Sorry, but when I'm bored to tears and screwing around with Fruity Loops for an hour it sounds almost exactly like this. And I don't even do electronicalistic musics.
Hearing the mix, I'm assuming you're producing on regular speakers. You might want to invest in some monitors and a sub. The whole idea of the song is suppressed by the flat sound, so you'd be smart as to look up some mixing and mastering guides.
Good first attempt though, at the very least you don't fall for the same mistakes most new producers do, I assume you have some background in music?
It would be wise to get proper monitors, not subs since most subs tend to change the way the bass (not all subwoofers sound the same, at least not in home cinema sets)
not bad, huh?
and here one more serious attempt: https://soundcloud.com/razzah/skrux-feat-mona-moua-being
https://soundcloud.com/arky-official/donut
its even worse than what u did, its from one of my friend. Always funny to hear such stuff xddddd
Good first attempt though, at the very least you don't fall for the same mistakes most new producers do, I assume you have some background in music?