English task help

Hello CF,

I'm a french student and my english teacher wants us to prepare a dossier on the subject of our choice. The only request is that it has to be under the form of a question, that would lead to a debate.
Who are cannabis users ? : BAD (only descriptive)
Should we legalize marijuana ? : GOOD (debate)

I picked this question : Do video games lead to crimes ?

In two months, I will have an oral exam without any notes and with audio/video/text documents that I would have chosen myself.

I first need to send an 400 words text that present the question, why it would be interesting to discuss about it and in what extend does it concerns me. I need your help to correct it, find the mistakes or the sentence that are not clear.

Here is the text :


Do video games lead to crime ?

In the past decades, rock music had often been accused of being the cause of violent behavior from its listeners. This parallel made between crimes and music was recurrent in the media during the development of those “hard rhythm” songs. It turned that the whole genre was not the reason of certain acts of violence, but that lyrics could explain some psychological aspects of the offenders. If the debate now seems outdated, another has taken place in newspaper, internet articles and TV reports.

It appears that video games, as rock used to be the scapegoat in the sixties, are being constantly accused of turning part of players into aggressive people. In 2003, a 17 years old boy from Alabama killed three policemen, stealing their guns and escaping with their car. Later, it has been said that the young man was a heavy player of “Grand Theft Auto”, a video game where the user incarnates a man that can do everything he wants in a city, from high speed driving to cold blood executions. GTA, a PEGI 18 rated series, always reopens the debate each time a new episodes is coming out.

It is not rare to see journalists and certain analysts making a link between horrible crimes and the fact that killers were using video games. The industry has always tried to defend itself, saying such bitter and cruel acts could not be simply related to products that are supposed to bring joy and leisure to its customers.

Do video games lead to crime ? Are they dangerous and can we really pretend that they are the main cause of murders, rapes and robberies ? We will try to see what are the arguments that are defending each side of the cause : people that are blaming video games against people that think the reasons have to be found somewhere else. In order to try and give a final answer to our question, we will study different responses and analyze which studies are based on a scientific approach.

My long experience in gaming and my passion of journalism had me got an interest on the subject. With our dossier, I would like to bring a new vision of video game’s place in our society and try to explain why it tends to be seen as an evil practice.