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QuoteExtra-Large clothing articles are enjoying an increase in asset due to the rise of sales of McDonald's and Domino's Pizza. At the same time, the sale of Virgin Megastore computer games also soared by 63%, what shows the unhealthy lifestyle of today's youth. According to Colin Waine, chairman of the national obesity forum, the young people know this and are very concerned about obesity, unfortunately not concerned enough to alter their bahaviour.
In refreshing the menu and hitting the 30-minute delivery deadline Chris Moore, Domino's chief executive, sees the reasons for their success. The consumers also get more and more concerned about their finances, so they will probably prefer going to Domino's Pizza, which plans an £18 million advertising campaign, than to an expensive restaurant. Mr. Moore can't tell if this switches in the future, but he thinks that the price point will help them to be in favor of the consumers.
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tell me pls and rename to TheoDor
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cuz i liked it better and cuz my teacher is very angry with my, if i dont do well in telling the class about this text
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ok i will change nick and help you fight against your teacher !
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oh, youre so nice
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how about NOW !
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not exactly what i wanted to see, but much better than b4<3
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what did you want to see than?
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simply TheoDor tbh
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but its only a nick :(
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right, but TheoDor was so oldsql n stuff
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yes you are right, but Cohen is my name !
first come me, then my e-me
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I'm off to bed, good night!
i guess that wasnt nais enough for me to care more than
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"Extra-Large clothing articles are enjoying an increase in popularity due to the growing sales of McDonald's and Domino's Pizza. At the same time, the amount of computer games sold by Virgin Megastores also soared by 63%, arguably demonstrating the unhealthy lifestyle of today's youth.

According to Colin Waine, chairman of the national obesity forum, the young people are aware of this and are concerned about obesity; unfortunately however, they are not concerned enough to alter their behaviour.

In refreshing the menu and hitting the 30-minute delivery deadline, Chris Moore, Domino's chief executive, can see the reasons behind their success. 'The consumers are becoming increasingly concerned about their finances, so they will probably prefer going to Domino's Pizza, which plans an £18 million advertising campaign, than to an expensive restaurant.'

Mr. Moore can't tell if this will change in the future, but he believes that the pricing strategy will help them to gain the favour of the consumer."



Quote by foonri edited chris moore's direct quote because his engrish sucks ass, change it back if you need it accurate
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rolling edits
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at the speed of light
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Extra-Large clothing articles are enjoying an increase in popularity due to the growing sales of McDonald's and Domino's Pizza. At the same time, Virgin megastore's gaming department saw a 63% rise in sales, arguably demonstrating the unhealthy lifestyle of today's youth.

According to Colin Waine, chairman of the national obesity forum, young people are aware of this and are concerned about obesity, but are unwilling or unable to change their behavior.

After refreshing the menu and hitting their 30-minute delivery deadline, Chris Moore, Domino's chief executive, is not suprised by the companies success: 'The consumers are becoming increasingly concerned about their finances, so they will probably prefer going to Domino's Pizza, which plans an £18 million advertising campaign, than to an expensive restaurant.'

Mr. Moore can't tell if this will change in the future, but he believes that the pricing strategy will help them to gain the favour of the consumer.


Your move.
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company's

:o)
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thank you very much, i like it<3
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instead of behaviour?

€ ah..didnt notice the a while reading it a 2nd time
2nd line: what shows -> showing / demonstrating
3rd line: National Obesity Forum
the young people know this -> young people are aware of their unhealthy lifestyle and are...
behaviour
In refreshing (whole sentence) -> Refreshing the menu and keeping to the 30-min delivery deadline are the reasons for sucess according to Chris Moore, Domino's chief executive.
The consumers are also getting more and more concerned about their financial situation, so they will prefer going to Domino's Pizza, which is planning a £18 million marketing campaign, rather than to an expensive restaurant. Mr. Moore can't tell if trend will continue in the future, but he is confident that the lower prices will keep them in the favour of the customers.
thank you 2:)
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look@edit & thx
the fact that youre directly attributing mcdonalds as the main reason for increasing sales of larger clothes is laughable

you should probably work on that!
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