english help

by butzilolZ • 27 Feb 2010, 17:09 • Journals
could someone corecct this a little bit:


Dear Anthony Webster
Thank you for your early answer.I want to rent your hollyday home in the week from 12.06.10 -19.06.10.
We are 5 bicyclists with racing bikes and we are very happy for this very beautiful house.
Many thanks and warm regards

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darthmob 27 Feb 2010, 17:13
To be honest that sounds a bit gay.
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Seanza 27 Feb 2010, 17:15
Dear Anthony Webster


Thankyou for your quick response.

I would like to rent your holiday home from 12.06.10 until 19.06.10.

We are a group of 5 cyclists and we are very grateful for the use of this very beautiful house.

Many thanks and warm regards
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butzilolZ 27 Feb 2010, 17:16
thanks :)
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Seanza 27 Feb 2010, 17:19
Np, but what Darthmob said is right. It's not something native English speakers would say.

Try this:

Dear Anthony Webster,

Thanks for the fast response. My friends & I would like to rent your holiday home from 12th of June until 19th of June this year.

There's 5 of us and we'd be extremely grateful for the use of this beautiful house.

Thanks again, take care.

<sign your name here>
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GoodGuyGary 27 Feb 2010, 17:17
Dear Anthony Webster
First of all i would like to thank you for your fast reply. Secondly I would like to rent your holiday home for 1 week during the 12.06.10 to 19.06.10.
We are 5 bicyclists with racing bikes and we would be very happy if you accept our offer for this exquisite house.
Thanks a lot
Regards
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stKz 27 Feb 2010, 17:22
bicyclists?
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GoodGuyGary 27 Feb 2010, 17:23
it exists, though it should be cyclist
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Nub 27 Feb 2010, 17:17
4th grade?
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butzilolZ 27 Feb 2010, 17:18
my dad wrote that....
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xedos 27 Feb 2010, 17:32
what Seanza said but use "we are looking forward to staying in this beautiful house"
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Deactivated2391 27 Feb 2010, 17:41
Dear Anthony Webster,

Before deciding upon rental of your holiday home, I looked on facebook for more information on the owner of said home. I stumbled across http://www.facebook.com/search/?q=anthony+webster&init=quick#!/pages/Salem-IL/Anthony-Webster/294499766630?ref=search&sid=650846394.2294292009..1 and am sorry to inform you we would not like to make use of your services. We are 5 cyclists and would not like to be associated with a kick ass homo. We are very afraid that our neatly waxed legs and tight shorts might lead to rape. Sorry, you just lost yourself 5 handsome customers.

Many thanks and warm regards
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Snorfiets 27 Feb 2010, 18:33
Dear Anthony Webster
Thank you for your early answer.I want to rent your hollyday (lol) home in the week from 12.06.10 -19.06.10.
We are 5 bisexual cyclists with racing bikes and we are very happy for this very beautiful brothel.
Many thanks and warm regards
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